▶ Your Answer :There might be some people who believe that
games are as important for adults as they are for children. However, I
personally disagree with the idea above for subsequent reasons. First of all,
adults should save their money. Second, it is better for them to develop other
ability instead of playing games.
First of all, adults should put aside money
for their future instead of buying games and some equipments. Nowadays, it is
helpful for adults to save money in preparing emergency. For example, there are
lots of danger like cancer, car accident and so on. According to a recent
survey done by a the institute of technology, 80 percent of respondents said that
it is better for adults to save money for their future instead of buying game
stuff. They have saved money for their future so most of them could deal with
bad happening. This clearly shows that games are not as important for adults as
they are for children.
Second, developing other ability is better
for adults instead of playing games. People usually waste their time to play
games. Recently, society requires various work so developing their ability is
helpful for them to survive in society. Let me bring up my personal story as an
example. My uncle usually played games when he was free from work instead of improving
his ability. He felt that he needed to develop his ability to survive in
present society. So he started to learning how to use computer. As a result, he
is working well at his work. If he had played games always, he might have gotten
fired.
In conclusion, adults should save their
money and it is better for them to develop other ability instead of playing
games. For these two reasons, I personally believe that games are not as
important for adults as they are for children.
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