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In the statement, the writer states that people learn things better from those at their own level. I agree with the statement for the following reasons. First of all, people tend to communicate profoundly when they are with the people at their own level. It is unquestionable that we can understand our friends better than teachers or the people at a higher level. (What makes us discuss more actively when we learn something is the better understanding. --> 이 문장은 의미가 확실하지 못한 것 같아요.) From my own experience, I tend to ask more questions when I study with my friends than in class. Additionally, A class debate can be one an example that explains how actively people have (have 대신 engage in 이 나을 것 같아요.) conversations and discussions debate with those who have similar educational backgrounds. the people at their own level. (계속 반복해서 at their own level이 나오니까 다른식으로 rephrase 하세요.) The reason of the success of a debate class is that students can reach towards knowledge through discussion with their classmates. Students can learn more from each other by actively participating in a class debate. They also should be encouraged to challenge each other. Secondly, learning from the people at a higher level sometimes can be one-way. Teachers or supervisors generally try to simply transfer their knowledge to the students. It is like injecting something to the students directly from the educators. Assume Suppose (혹은 Imagine) that you are in a class and the professor is giving a lecture to the students. It might be hard to start debating with the professor even if you have a different point of view. However, this injection-method of education is ineffective in a way that because the students can only learn the same prospective perspective that their educators introduce. injected. (inject라는 단어도 앞에서 여러번 사용 했기 때문에 다른 단어를 사용하면 좋습니다.) It is important for students to learn about different point of views and I believe that they can learn such things by discussing with others at a similar academic level. What is important for the students who are ready to learn is to know as many viewpoints and have as many academic discussions as they can because they are in the stage of fledgling knowledge. In sum, I think learning things from those at their own level is better than from those at a higher level because they can understand each other better have active communication and they need to be exposed to diverse viewpoints. and knowledge.
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