Some people might say that selecting a job in the same field as
their parents is better than to choose a different career for themselves
from them, while others do not think that way.
If I have had to choose one among two
different opinions, I would say it is much better for young people to
select a job in the same field as their parents since it has more advantages.
There are a couple of reasons and examples as follows.
First of all, young people will be able to carry out various tasks
required in the same field as their parents and it can make it easy
for them to get accustomed with the tasks. To explain, they are familiar
with the tasks. This is because they have watched(관찰하다 = observed도 사용가능하지만 watched도 나쁘진 않습니다) what their parents
did in their work for a long time. Therefore, they naturally know
well about a lot of things related to the job. According to
the a study conducted by a group of
sociology majors in Seoul national university,
people who work in the analogous field with their parents work more efficiently
than others working in a different field from their parent' one parents. This was due to the fact that they got
to know naturally specific abilities that would be required when they worked
and had them. It seemed that it was resulted from a long term observation on
their parents.
On top of that, if they select a job in the same field as
their parents, they would be less likely to fail. You
cannot deny the fact that everyone faces/encounters difficulties in work
and successful life their success depends
on how well they solve the problems in challenging situations. In this
sense, having a job in the same field as parents indicates that you
have good advisors. Parents know well how to deal with and solve problems as
they have already experienced them when they worked. I will take my personal
experience to ellucidate illustrate my opinion.
When I was a teacher in Gangnam high school, I
had a problem with one of my students. She thought that I did not care of
about her very well and thought that I even discriminated(차별하다) her among from
other students. I really worried and pondered in order to solve the problem. I
asked it to my mother who had been a teacher in a middle school and she
gave me a good advice, like that was
showing my sincere mind to her in various ways such as writing a letter and
spending more time with her. I implemented her advice right away and it had a
highly positive impact on solving the problem.
To sum up,
if young people choose a similar job to their parents' one,
they can deal with tasks that they have to do in work as they are
familiar with them. Moreover, they will be able to solve
problems which they would meet inevitably when they work because it
is possible for them to receive helpful advice easily from
their parents as good advisers. In this regard, I firmly believe that having
a job in the same field as parents is much better than choosing a different
career for themselves.
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