▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that internet service should be paid
by people. However, I believe that the government should provide internet
service for free of charge. This is because using the internet service for free enables people to
relieve stress while paying for internet service can put them under stress
Paying for internet
service prevents people from enjoying a better quality of life by putting them
under stress. Interestingly, a renowned social scientist in South Korea
published an article in “The Korean Herald” last Tuesday which claims that
charged internet service can put them under stress. My own example demonstrates
some of disadvantages of charged charging
internet service. For instance, I had to buy something or send an email; however there
are not was no free Wi-Fi and I did not charge
pay for my internet service cost. Consequently,
I did not do anything and this event gave me a serious loss. My example
demonstrates some of disadvantages of charged charging
internet service. (예시가 너무 일차원적이고
극단적이어서 설득력이 부족합니다.)
On the other hand,
free internet service allows people to relieve stress. Understanding the daily
environment of people and potential role of using internet
service for free is necessary to substantiate this view. Every morning, once
they are at work, they have to use their money because of chores and continue to use more even at home because they charge
have to pay for their internet service cost.
Such an exhausting routine repeats itself and
ultimately wears down people. As a way to manage the ensuing stress, they can
spend time doing their hobby such as internet shopping and reading internet
news whenever they want to do for free. Even if it is a short time, this frees
their mind from intense mental pressure from work. In this regard, I leaned
that free internet service promotes people to relieve stress. (현실적으로 다가오지 않습니다.)
To sum up, I believe that the government should
provide internet service for free of charge is better paid by people.
Consequently, the importance of my view cannot be underestimated for the
reasons I have mentioned above.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
Fair (17-23) |
Score |
18 |
Overall
Comment: |
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일차원적이고 설득력이 부족했습니다. 문법 오류들도 있으니 위 지적사항들을 참고하세요. |
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