▶ Your Answer : Some people might say that it is not important for people to arrive immediately at every time. However, in my opinion, I support that believe that it is crucial to prepare early and be on time for classmates. one reason is to do not waste time, and the others one is to gain important person to me friendship.
To begin with, you must make your spare time because it you cannot be late when you were are going everywhere somewhere, such as group events. If you waste time, will time wait for you? The answer will be is no. In the world we live in, time is gold. Since you cannot turn time back, you must save time as much as we you can. For example, back in my college, I was very tired to go to my school, so sometimes I made ready for my class lately was late to class and even to my group study too. At that time, my friends gave advise for to me. "Make your spare time, and then you will never be late for every moment." It was very bothered me ,but there should be days when I stick my day. I do not want to lag behind my work. So from then, I am never be late.
On top of that, you might be lose your friends because no one would dislike likes to disturb others. Like There is a saying," it is who you know, not what you do, that makes you succeed. " The meaning of success has completely changed compared to the past. If it was merely focusing on one's own way and excelling others, not it is different now. Along with your own ability, It is crucial to have people who can lend you a hand when you are in trouble. For instance, my friends always got good point marks so I doubted that she studied hard whenever I hang hung out with my other friends. I asked her how you she received a great credit? and she says said that you should never be late for group project, then so that you can listen carefully to other classmate so you can and achieve a good academic performance. so I promised to my friends to be on time and as a result, at the midterm exam, I gained good mark. point.
In the conclusion, I firmly believe that people shoud keep their be on time for school projects. It is my belief that my argument regarding this topic has been effectively and precisely delivered from the reasons mentioned above. Never should we forget that this issue may have huge impact on our future.
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Grammar: - Plural and singular form에 더 신경 쓰기. - Fragmented sentences들 줄이기. ex.) Such as, group events. --> fragmented sentence - So로 문장을 시작하지 말기.
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