■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : The widespread use of the internet has given people access to information on a level never experienced before. How does this increase in the availability of information influence life in today’s world? |
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▶ Your Answer :
There is an argument over whether or not people can access
to information not able to access before if the Internet was not developed.
Some people believe that our life has not changed a lot regardless of the
presence of the Internet. My view, however, is that people became to experience
what they could not experience before the development of the Internet. This is
because the level of knowledge increased up to high level because people are
able to gain useful information easily on the Internet. Moreover, we are also
able to access to harmful information as well, so it has also a had effect on
people.
To begin with, I believe that the Internet is very useful
because people can search any information what they are curious in their mind.
Even people can access to the information anytime and anywhere. It gives tremendous
convenience to people in modern days. Therefore, most people usually have a lot
of knowledge in various genres as well as common sense. For example, we can
take a look at the trend through Facebook, which is social network service. At
the first time, Facebook was initially introduced as social network
application. We could communicate our daily life with friends posting writings,
photos, and videos. However, nowadays, its role was slightly changed. People
share a lot of information and their thinking about that with people who do not
know face through Facebook. And as we can see, most of them have a lot of
information even what they did not experience.
On top of that, information on the Internet has a great
impact on people on various ways. Indiscriminate information can be harmful to
people even though it has positive effects. There are many bad news such as
immoral politicians, conflict between company and labor union, celebrities’
sexual rumor and so on. This information can be stressful and even affect
mental disease to people. To be specific, I can give a woman actor’s sex
scandal and its impact on children as an example. There was a huge scandal
about a video that a famous woman actor appeared on last year. However, she was
not considered it as a big deal and it was seriously shock to everyone who love
her. The problem is that some children who do not have discriminate right or
not praised her and respected her as a great feminist. Like this, sometimes, information
even we do not need to know has unexpected result.
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