▶ Your Answer : Some people might say that it is not important for people to arrive on time. immediately at every time. However, in my opinion, I believe that it is crucial to be punctual and prepared for the people and/or the event you are supposed to attend. One reason is not to waste someone else's time, and the other is to build trust with other people.
To begin with, you must create a reasonable schedule for yourself. If you are attending too many events, you are not likely to be on time. If you show up late, especially at a group event, you are wasting many other people's time. In the world we live in, time is gold. Since you cannot turn back time, you must save time as much as you can. For example, when I was in college, I was very tired to go to school. So I used to arrive late for my group study and even for classes. My friends advised me to make spare time. (then you never late for every moment." It was very bothered me ,but there should be days when I stick my day. I do not want to lag my work. So then, I never be late.)--> 이 부분은 무엇을 말하고자 하는지 모르겠네요.
On top of that, you might lose your friends. (because no one would dislike to disturb other. Like there is a saying," it is who you know, not what you do, that makes you succeed.") --> 이 부분도 해석 하기가 어려워서 생략 합니다. The meaning of success has completely changed compared to the past. Success is not about being better than others. It is crucial to have people who can lend you a hand when you are in trouble. For instance, my friend always gets good grades. So I think that she studies hard when I hang out with my other friends. So I asked her about it. She told me to attend gruop studies on time to get academic information from other classmates. I did what she told me and I was able to get a good grade on my midterm exam.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that people should arrive on time for school projects. Being punctual will lead you to success, as well as to good relationship with other people.
Writing score (0-30): 8 Score(1-5): 1 Grammar: 기본적인 문법이 너무 많이 틀리네요. 글쓰기 할때 항상 문장 시작은 대문자로 하셔야 합니다. 품사 구분를 더 공부 하시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 중간중간 고치려고 해도 의도가 파악되지 않아 고치지 못한 부분도 있습니다. 글쓰기가 많이 어려우면 모범답안 많이 읽어보는것이 도움이 될 것 같습니다. 수고 하셨어요. |