▶ Your Answer :
Nowadays, many people like to travel. Some
people may argue that a group tour with a guide is not the best way to travel is not in group led by a tour
guide. However, I believe that the best way to travel is to travel in a group led by a
tour guide.
To begin with, traveling with a tour guide is beneficial benefit for students people because they are able to get a lot of knowledge. This means that the tour guide
helps people students have information on the region they are a traveling region. 굳이 학생으로 범위를 좁힐 필요가 없으므로 '사람들'로 지칭하는 게 낫습니다. For example, when I was a
university student, I traveled Tokyo with my friends. We needed help in order
to visit Tokyo because we could not speak Japanese. Thus, we hired Jenny who
was a Korean but she lived 20 twenty years there. and Sshe knew a lot of cultures of Japan. Japan's cultures.
Jenny guided Japan palaces and famous parks and by talking Korean. While
visiting a palace, I could not read a sign that was the palace information, but
Jenny explained helped me know about the information. Therefore, traveling with a group needs a
tour guide.
Moreover, when group members travel, they have to travel with a tour
guide because they are able to save time. Most tour guides are professional
some regions. Their knowledge about the places help people not to lose their do not lost routes.
For example, when my friend Jim visited Spain with his family, they almost lost their route. However, they did not lose because they travel with a tour guide. After
his family visited a museum, they had to go to a hotel. Yet, their opinions
that on how they went back to route the hotel were different each other. Soon, the tour guide
talked about the route and they could go to the hotel. If they had gone there go by
themselves, they would not have found their route that easily. may lose the route. The tour guide's help allowed them not to do not
lose the route. Thus, they could can save a lot of time. Hence, traveling with group
members needs a tour guide.
In conclusion, the best way to travel is tour in a group led by a tour guide
because people are able to get a lot of knowledge and people are able to save a
lot of time.
Comment : 질문 내용은 그룹으로 투어할 때 가이드가 필요한가/아닌가라기보다는 최고의 여행이 혼자 가는 것보다 '단체로 가이드여행을 하는 것'이라고 보는지에 대한 내용으로 파악해야할 것 같아요. 따라서 그룹여행에서는 가이드가 필요하다, 라는 연결이 아니라 그룹으로 가이드를 대동해서 여행하면 좋은 점을 서술하는 형태로 답을 제시하는 편이 더 적절합니다. 지식 측면이나 시간 절약 측면에서 주장을 제시한 부분들은 아주 좋았어요. 내용을 설명할 때 불필요한 요소들을 빼고 꼭 필요한 내용만 넣어서 가이드가 '왜' 지식적인 측면에서 도움을 주고 '시간절약' 측면에서 도움을 주는지를 잘 보여줄 수 있게끔 발전시켜주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 같은 단어를 계속 반복해서 사용하기보다는 다양한 단어를 활용해서 보여주는 것이 좋으니 단어 활용도 신경써주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Independent Writing Rubrics Score 3/5 An essay at this level is marked by one or more of the following : - Addresses the topic and task using somewhat developed explanations, exemplifications and/or details (일정 수준의 설명과 예시를 활용하여 문제의 요구사항을 해결함) - Displays unity, progression and coherence, though connection of ideas may be occasionally obscured (문맥이 모호한 부분들이 있을 수 있으나 통일성, 연속성, 일관성이 어느 정도 드러남) - May demonstrate inconsistent facility in sentence formation and word choice that may result in lack of clarity and occasionally obscure meaning (문장의 구성 또는 어휘의 선택에서 내용의 명확성이 떨어지거나 의미 전달이 불분명한 부분들이 있음) - May display accurate but limited range of syntactic structures and vocabulary (답안의 내용은 주제에 부합하지만 제한된 문장구조나 어휘를 사용함)
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