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Some people thinks
that high school students should be prohibited to choose some from choosing of their classes. However, in my
opinion, it is essential for high school students
to choose their classes. This is because when
students have the
opportunity to choose classes, they can plan about their future more
effectively and show greater achievement about classes.
To begin with, It is
efficient and beneficial for students when
preparing for the future conducted by their own. Without such chances, it is
highly unlikely that they would plan wisely. For example, when I transferred to the other another
high school at 18 years old, I should make curriculum on my own was allowed to choose my own curriculum. It was
automatic and fixed at my previous school The
system in my previous school was the very opposite, so I felt
uncomfortable. But after a few days, I realized
that there are a lot of different classes even I have that I had not ever known about. I could experience literature, history, biology
class and so on. It laid the groundwork for
choosing my university major. As a result, I
selected mechanical engineering based on experience during my high school
period. If they had not provided an opportunity
to make my schedule on the school, then I should have been choose would have chosen my major based on few just a little knowledge.
On top of that,
students who make their own schedule show more
remarkable outcomes about in their classes.
Because Since students don’t have to waste time to take unwanted classes,
they could focus on other classes they had choose chosen. To be specific, there was a survey by the Institute of Korean educational system with high
school students as respondents. The purpose of
this survey is was to check student’s
achievement of study the students’ academic
achievements. The result shows that the achievement scores are is higher when they have more chances to
choose classes.
To sum up, choosing their own
classes makes students to plan about their carrier career more efficiently and to perform excellently. In
this regard, High schools should make
opportunities for students to select their own
classes.
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0-30 Score Scale |
Fair (17-23) |
Score |
19 |
Overall
Comment: |
포인트가 좋고 예시들도 좋습니다.
다만 아쉬운 점은 문법 오류가 잦다는 점 입니다. 위 지적사항들을 참고해 주시길 바랍니다. |
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