▶ Your Answer :
The reading passage contends that the
alternative energy that harnesses the power of wave can replace the
conventional fossil fuels by giving three examples. On the other hand, in the
lecture, the professor disagrees with the argument. There are several reasons
as follows. 요약문은 분량이 너무 많아도 감점요인이 될 수 있다고 해요. 불필요한 수식어구를 빼고 더 간단하게 다듬어보셔도 좋을 것 같습니다.
First of all, the lecturer argues that
people missed the one important factor about harnessing the wave farms. The
wave farms causes many technical problems related to power generations due to
the harsh marine conditions. The convertors that used for converting wave-energy
into electricity often can malfunction. be malfunctioned. In addition, the productivity of
energy generation is fluctuated according to the nearby environment. This casts
doubt on the reading passage’s claim that wave-energy facilities are dependable
energy sources.
Also, the speaker asserts that wave farms cause
the severe devastation of marine environment. This is because the device that
utilizes in the convertor and is able to move other place freely contains uses the
harmful and toxic chemical which can spread to other places. It has a negative impact on marine environment.
Thus, tThis refutes the reading passage’s claim that wave farms are
environmentally friendly facilities.
Last but not least, the final point made by the lecturer is that wave farms have negatively influence on the beautiful scenery.
The convertor is highly visible because it has to be painted with bright color.
Moreover, this device is set up close to shore, so it is well spotted by tourists and visitors. This contradicts the reading passage’s claim that wave-energy
facilities do not positively affect the natural scenery around the installed region.
Comment : 요약문이므로 필요이상으로 문단이 길어지는 부분에 유의해서 간결하게 내용을 줄여주세요. 대립되는 내용들은 대부분 잘 정리해주신 것 같아요. 품사오류나 능동/수동 오류가 종종 눈에 띄니 꼼꼼하게 검토해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3.5/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections. |