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In the give set of materials, there are some discrepancies between the viewpoints of the lecturer and the author over the issue of whether people adopt electronic medical record systems rather than paper-based record systems. The lecturer states that there are a number of positive consequences on electronic systems, whereas the author suggests otherwise.
To begin with, the lecturer debunks the author's first conjecture. To elaborate in detail, the lecture argues that keeping the paper-based record systems also are needed when the form of electronic systems are adopted by doctors. This is because doctors need to keep their medical record on paper forms due to emergency situation; paper-based medical records play a significant role as a back-up form in some special situation. This casts doubt on the reading passage's assertion that electronic form of medical record can reduce costs.
The speaker also indicates dissent over the reading passage's idea on preventing errors. The lecturer sounds convinced that the author is making a manifest error since most doctors examine patients by using handwriting paper form, which staffs can use and interpret. Putting it differently, many doctors are making a habit of handwriting and interacting with their assistants by them. (그래서 실제로 실수가 적은건지 아니면 실수를 방지할 수 있는지 reading이 지적한 실수에 대한 부분이 lecture에서 어떻게 만회되는지 내용을 찾아 작성해주세요) However, the author clarifies that the use of electronic records can provide opportunities for decreasing errors in medical field.
Third, the lecturer goes on to expound that the author's final point on aiding research is flawed. To corroborate this opinion, the lecturer mentions that it is not necessary and difficult for doctors to conduct a research by electronic form. This is due to the fact that there are too many obstacles to overcome such as permission to access patient's privacy medical information, since it is a particularly important issue in the United States. This counters the author's suggestion that electronic medical records can greatly help doctors to research for their experiments.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
ADDRESSING TOPIC
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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FAIR
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FAIR
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FAIR
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GOOD
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GOOD
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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With the three convincing ideas that the lecturer posit, the assumptions made by the reading passage are all rendered groundless. |