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Some people think whether a student’s room is clean or dirty does not have relationship with his or her success. They may think that there are more important factors than a condition of the room. However, I do not agree with the opinion above. This is because students with clean rooms can concentrate on their studying better and save their time. First of all, students can concentrate on their studying better in a tidy room. Generally, people can concentrate on working more in a clean room. In a messy room, there are many things that attract people’s attention which can disturb disturbing people(같은 내용을 반복안하셔도 됩니다). For instance, when I was in high school, I met my friend Dave in my house to study together for the quiz. Right after Dave came into my room, he found some comic books putting on the floor. While studying, He read these books and we started to talk about the books for a while. We even did a dart game that I put on the bed. Thus, we could not concentrate on studying and spent more time on playing games and chatting. It made us not to get prevented us from getting good grades on the quiz. students can save their time. Generally, people can find their stuff easily in a tidy room because they know where they put these things well. Thus, since they do not need to spend much time to find their materials, it can make them save their time. For example, when I was in middle school, I did not like cleaning my room. Therefore, my room was always messy, and I always spent a lot of time to find my materials to do my assignments. One day, my art teacher gave me an assignment. However, I could not finish my homework until the deadline because I used too much time to find my stuff to do for the assignment. It even took 20 minutes to find a small eraser. To sum up, I believe that students with tidy rooms can achieve greater success than those with messy ones. This is because students can concentrate on their studies more and save their time.
이유가 굉장히 좋은 것 같습니다. mess와 messy를 따로 쓰면 더 좋을 것 같습니다 마지막 conclusion도 깔끔합니다 문법에만 신경쓰면 좋을 것 같습니다 |