▶ Your Answer :
[서론 한 문단으로 묶어주세요] The
reading and listening are discussing that whether unique shape of shark has
advantages or has not. 어떤 상어인지 종 이름이 언급되었을텐데, 그 명칭까지 함께 요약해주어야 해요.지문 확인해주세요.
The
reading asserts flat and extended head may have some merits. However, tThe
listening casts doubts on this reading.
It
argues arguing that they are is all unclear and wrong.
[본론1 한 문단으로 묶어주세요] First
of all, an the author of the reading claims its head expends eyesight, allowing it to
look all sides.
However, the listening listener contends this advantage is only applied to apparent objects, since its Its
head would blind some spots and that sharks can not see the in front. As a result, it
can’t help capture its preys.
[본론2 한 문단으로 묶어주세요] On
top of that, the article puts forth the idea that a larger nasal passage that sharks
have with sense of smell let sharks find their its prey faster than others.
However,
the lecture points out this claim of the reading is wrong. Because becuase no studies have turned
out that it is an advantage of shark head.
[본론3 한 문단으로 묶어주세요] Lastly,
the listening asserts the reason of the shark's quick quickly turn is for flexibility of its back,
not for its wide and ,flat head. Also it does not use its head often. This it contradicts the claim of the reading passage that this
unique shape of head helps sharks turn and pass water more easily.
Comment : 두 지문이 어떤 topic을 다루고 있는지를 명확히 밝혀주어야 합니다. 그냥 상어의 머리모양이 아니라 특정 상어의 특이한 머리 모양에 대한 내용일 가능성이 높은데, 지문을 확인해서 키워드를 보완해주세요. 서론과 각 본론의 구성이 구분되도록 문단 구성도 다듬어주세요. 전체적으로 아직 한 편의 완성된 글이라고 보기에는 문법 오류가 많은 편입니다. 주술호응과 수량표현 등 문법사항에 초점을 두고 좀 더 내용을 정리해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 2.5/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections. |