▶ Your Answer :
The reading passage contends that the
phenomenon of red rain in Kerala can be explained rationally for three reasons.
On the other hand, the lecture brings up several points that contradict contribute to this
argument. >space
First of all, the lecture insists that bats가 원인일 수 없다는 '주장'을 먼저 정리하고 detail을 연결해주는 것이 좋아요. if red rain is caused by massive destruction
of flock of bats, over 5 millions of bats should be died off. Moreover, wings
and bones of bats are not found in the rain. This casts doubt on the reading
passage’s claim that huge deaths of bats are the reason of red rain. and it is
supported by the analysis that discovered the presence of bat DNA in the rain.
Second, according to the lecture, the explanation related to volcanic disaster
is not reasonable. The phenomenon of red rain only occurred in Kerala. However,
other countries such as the Philippines, and Vietnam should be suffered the same
phenomenon in the case that the volcanic eruption in the Philippines is responsible
for the red rain. This counters the reading passage’s claim that recent eruption of
Mont Mayon resulted in red rain because cloud of acidic dust appears red.
The other main point the lecture makes is that there are only a few factories in India, which does not release enough chemicals that to make a red rain. In addition,
cities which local factories are concentrated on did not experience the red
rain. This refutes the reading passage’s claim that because local factories that emit industrial chemicals which appear red when they contact with moisture, it
lead to the red rain phenomenon.
Comment : 전체적으로 두 지문이 대립되는 포인트를 잘 정리해주셨어요. 첫번째 문단에서 contribute라 표현하면 두 지문이 같은 입장을 가지고 있다는 뜻이 되니 유의하셔야 해요. 통합형은 lecture내용을 중점적으로 요약하는 문제이므로 reading내용은 더 간략하게 정리해도 괜찮으니 간결하게 줄일 수 있는 부분들은 더 정리해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 4/5 A response at this level is generally good in selecting the important information from the lecture and in coherently and accurately presenting this information in relation to the relevant information in the reading, but it may have minor omission, inaccuracy, vagueness, or imprecision of some content from the lecture or in connection to points made in the reading. A response is also scored at this level if it has more frequent or noticeable minor language errors, as long as such usage and grammatical structures do not result in anything more than an occasional lapse of clarity or in the connection of ideas.
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