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Generally
speaking, the vast majority of people work day in and day out, because they
need money in daily life. Although people try to pursue their dream via the
work, it rarely happens due to the inherent attributes of the work, which has
to do with making profits. Aside from making money, however, some people find
diverse meanings through the work, which serve as other reasons why people
work.
Firstly, pure affection toward the work can be one reason that people
work. People often find fundamental reasons to work by accomplishing rough
tasks at work. Such type of people do not really care about how much they
are paid, and but instead, they put their
passion on the work, since they love what they are doing from the bottom of their heart. For instance, a friend of mine, who
is a well-known fashion designer in Korea, has dedicated his life to creating
and designing new clothes, since he loves what he does. Despite the fact that
he did not make enough money few years ago, he always put his devotions on
doing his works. Through his attitude toward the work, I have come to realize the that money is not the only reason to work.
Secondly, people can function as a constitute of a society by doing work.
Since people are designed to be a social animals,
they have the willingness to become a part of
the society. In this regards, working enables people to get into the society as
a constituent. For instance, my dad who used to work as a public servant for
more than 30 years retired last year. For more than two months after
retirement, he felt depressed and lethargic on everything. However, he was
fully recovered from the depression after finding a
new place to work thanks to the recommendation of his old colleague. Every
morning he says to my family that going to the workplace
makes him to feel alive.
All in all, although it is inevitable that the primary purpose of working
is to make money, working gives other influences to individuals. From time to
time, people purely love the work itself, or realize they are a part of the
society due to the work. I believe that the more reasons for working are
generated, the more people can fully contribute to their work.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
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Comment: |
비교적 어려운 주제였는데, 매우 잘
풀어나가셨어요. 예시들이 좋고 논리적으로 잘 설명하셨습니다. 매우 사소한 문법 오류들만 주의하시면 만점을 받으실 수 있을 거에요.
수고하셨습니다. |
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