Some people might contend that there is no connection between the past and now or the future. They would think they do not have to comprehend the event happened in the past. In my opinion, however, I firmly believe that a good understanding of the past would help us by giving an idea to solve problems and giving possibilities of development.
First, without knowledge, people are more likely to make same mistakes over and over again in general. They need to know the problems and solutions. If there is a problem right now, they need to look back upon up the past. There might be some similar problems. For instance, people would not know how to act during earthquake. How should they know about escaping to go outside of the buildings or hide hiding under the desks without the experience from the past? People have been experienced it several times and find the solutions or at least helps.
This demonstrates that people should comprehend the past in order to figure out solutions.
Second, the world can be improved by understanding the past. Nothing can succeed without obstacles. There are several obstacles and solutions. (Where?) By finding solutions, things can be developed and get faster. I would like to demonstrate my assertion by giving an example of our life. There are a plenty of problems in one's life. It requires a lot of time at first in solving issues. In contrast, once they used to it, they can find solutions easily. Also, let's assume that we are solving a math problem. We need to understand the concept and process at first. Then solving plenty of problems. After all that, we can easily solve other problems.
In conclusion, people can solve problem easily and can be improved than ever before. For all these two reasons I have mentioned above, I strongly support that we need to comprehend the past.
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