Some people may say that success in life derives from taking risks or
chances. However, I have a different idea. I believe that achievement
originates from thorough planning for the
following reasons. First, people are able to know about request condition
can know in advance the required conditions and
prepare carefully. Second, they can save money.
To begin with, success in
life comes from systematic plans planning because
people can prepare for employment of through thorough researching of requisite conditions thoroughly. In other words, in order to get a
job, it is inevitable that people have to know the
necessary requirements necessary
for employment. If they do not prepare for it
carefully, it is they are less likely to
get a job because the a person with
little preparation cannot outperform other candidates. For example, when I was
a college student, by graduation, I had to find a job. During the college
years, in order to get a reasonable job, I had devised
a systematic a plan. I had enhanced my practical skills and achieved
various certificates conducive to employment. As
a result of my efforts, I was able to enter a large company called Apple.
Therefore, systematic planning can help people
to succeed in their life.
Second, achievement in
people's life originates from careful planning since people can minimize
expenditure. Thorough planning can make it
possible for people to save money greatly, which leads this saved money to
be used for allows
them to use the money in a better way such as investment of land and
saving. This means that when people have a systematic plan to spend money, it
is possible to reduce impulse purchases and
utilize money for where what they exactly
need. Saving money is an important factor to achieve in peoples’ lives life because the more money they
save, the more fortunate fortune they
make. (너무 당연한 걸 적으셨어요. 돈을 아끼면
당연히 돈이 많아지는 게 사실인데, 그것 때문에 연구까지 했다라고 주장하시기엔 조금 아쉬움이 있습니다.) For example, there is a study conducted in Stanford
University. They performed a survey for people.
They asked them whether careful planning for money
consumption for use of money helps
them to make a fortunate or not. (위 세 문장은 합쳐주시는 게 더 자연스럽습니다) Three quarter 75 percent
said that it could have a great impact on increase of fortunate
one’s chances of earning a fortune. Therefore, succeed
success in people' life are is closely
related to a thorough planning.
To sum up, through thorough planning, people can make preparation
prepare for employment successfully and
expenditure can be reduced enormously. Therefore, in this regard, I firmly
believe that achievement are is closely
connected to careful planning (결론이 아쉽습니다. Achievement of what? 매우 애매하게 결론은 지으셨어요.)