▶ Your Answer : In the given set of materials, the reading
passage and the lecture deal with compact fluorescent lamps to debate whether
the new lamp is efficient. The reading passage is providing three pieces of
evidence to prove its point, whereas the lecturer argues against it by
providing three compelling rebuttals.
The reading passage asserts the idea that
the price of a CFL is way too high, when compared to the benefits it provides.
This high price prevents consumers from purchasing it. From the perspective of
the average consumer, it is a waste. The professor casts doubt because CFL can
use longer than incandescent lamps. Using incandescent lamps will make people
spend more money.
The reading passage claims that CFL contain
mercury, which causes environmental problems. While people dispose CFLs as
universal waste, the recycling of the lamps should be urged. The professor
refutes the idea because CFL can be reused for the glasses. And if it is not
broken, it is not dangerous.
The reading passage points out that a major
problem of CFLs is related to healthy. CFLs emit the ultraviolet rays that put
health in risk and people with sensitive skin, or rare skin conditions, may even
develop skin cancer. The professor challenges the idea because it is rare
situation when people expose themselves longer and closely to CFLs.
Good (24)
두번째 본문 -CFL 이 reuse하는 대상이 아니라, reuse 당하는 대상이므로 수동태로 쓰는 것이 적절합니다. 세번째 본문 -when people are exposed ~ 로 쓰시던가 본문에 바꾼대로 써주세요. 또한, 마지막에 to CFLs 는 반드시 들어가야 합니다. 그렇지 않으면 사람들이 무엇에 expose 되었는지에 대한 대상이 문장에서 부재하기 때문에 의미가 모호해집니다.
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