▶ Your Answer :
The lecturer opposes the given article by calling the perspective “optimistic”
and referring to some experts’ expression of “illusion.” Vis-à-vis to the three
points made in the article saying that wave power is reliable, eco-friendly, and not
negatively affecting the surrounding landscape. , sShe claims that they could be
rebutted with the following arguments.
First, according to the lecture, due to technical problems which frequently take place, power generators
could be easily disrupted. As a result, they malfunction and thus are
inconstant and unpredictable in terms of generating power through wave. This , which
is totally the opposite from the writer’s description that wave power is reliable.
Secondly, the article demonstrates that wave-energy facilities are
eco-friendly and do not cause any environmental damage since no fossil fuel is
used in turbine and they fluctuate according to waves. However, the speaker
points out that turbines imply harmful chemicals inside of each, so if it leaks leaked
into the ocean, the toxic materials will cause huge damage to the marine
ecosystem.
Lastly, the lecturer explains that the floating converters to generate
wave energy are highly visible as they are painted in bright colors. Therefore,
tourists can easily see find them in the landscape, which makes the reading's claim “no
negative impact on the surrounding landscape” a false statement.
Considering all the counterarguments above,
the teacher effectively illustrates why the article positive to wave energy
cannot be absolutely true and that society needs to carefully deliberate on whether
or not to use wave energy as an alternative to fossil fuels.
Comment : 전체적으로 지문 내용의 핵심적인 요소들을 잘 파악해주신 것 같아요. 다만 아직 요약문으로 보기에는 불필요한 서술들이 많다는 점이 아쉽습니다. 통합형이 요구하는 것은 '요약문'이므로 가급적 150~200단어 내외로 내용을 정리해주는 것이 좋습니다. 서론에서는 간단하게 두 지문이 어떤 주제를 공통으로 다루고 있고 어떻게 입장을 대립하고 있는지 소개해주면 충분합니다. 요약문에서는 글 전체 내용을 다시 요약하는 결론문단은 사실상 필요 없으므로 서론, 본론1~3개로 구성해서 작성해주시면 됩니다. 문장도 필요 이상으로 길어지지 않게 적절히 내용 단위로 끊어주세요. 간결하게 서술하는 부분만 신경쓰시면 충분히 좋은 답변 쓰실 수 있을 거예요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 4/5
A response at this level is generally good in selecting the important information from the lecture and in coherently and accurately presenting this information in relation to the relevant information in the reading, but it may have minor omission, inaccuracy, vagueness, or imprecision of some content from the lecture or in connection to points made in the reading. A response is also scored at this level if it has more frequent or noticeable minor language errors, as long as such usage and grammatical structures do not result in anything more than an occasional lapse of clarity or in the connection of ideas. |