▶ Your Answer :
There might be some people who believe that it is better to
spend money on trips than to put it aside for the future. However, I personally
disagree with the idea above for subsequent reasons. First of all, you should
put aside money for illness or accident. Second, it is better to save money for
your retirement.
First of all, you should save money for illness or accident.
This is because, illness and accident are not predictable nowadays. Also, it is
really expensive for people to have surgery. According to a recent survey done
by SJW institute of technology, 80 percent of respondents said that they should
have put aside money for emergency. They did not think that they would do not get any
accident or illness. But they did one day and they had trouble with money for
surgery. This clearly shows that people should put aside money for illness or
accident.
Second, you need to save money for your retirement.
Recently, it is hard for old people to find a job. Therefore, they cannot make
money for living without a job. Let me bring up my personal experience as an
example. My grandparents did not put aside money for their retirement because
they spent all money to help their children. They tried to find a job but it
was really hard to find a job recently. And they could not make money so they
are receiving money from government. If they had saved money for their
retirement, they would have had better life than now.
In conclusion, you should put aside money for illness or
accident and it is better to save money for your retirement. For these two
reasons, I personally think that it is better to put aside money for future
than to spend it on trips.
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