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Nowadays, most people have at least a television in their house. There is a lot of controversy over its use. Some people think that television can have negative effect on our lives. However, in my opinion, I think that television has positive impact not only on adults but also young people. This is because there are various programs to give an effective information to people and improve young people’s language abilities.
First of all, television has various programs to provide abundant information for people such as news and health broadcast. News report things based on the fact that happened around the world. It can lead people to develop their knowledge widely. Health broadcast provides practical information to advanced in our health. For example, when I watched health broadcast about symptoms of various diseases, there were are few things that my mom had suffered for a long time. So, we went to the hospital and she is alright all right now. I believe that health program led my mother to go to the hospital.
In addition, many kinds of television programs show that different people talk about diverse topics. There are various accents, pronunciations and expressions that can help people to develop their language abilities. If viewers are children, they could learn how to speak in their language more quickly and Iif they are young students, they could learn their language skills with sophistication. A study was conducted by Korean board of education to determine whether television could affect on young people’s language skills. The group scored thirty-eight percent of higher on a test of spelling, speaking and reading rather than other group who did never watched television during the study. This was because that young people tended to imitate someone’s way of talking on television.
To sum up, many kinds of programs on television could lead people to develop their knowledge about diverse topics and language abilities. In this regard, I strongly believe that television has positive impact on people.
Good (24) 서론 -adults
첫번째 본문 -수 일치. 단수이므로 provide-->provides -문맥상 과거이므로 are-->were -alright이 적절합니다. 괜찮다는 의미. all right은 다 맞다는 의미.
두번째 본문 -문맥상 과거이므로 watched
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