▶ Your Answer :
In the reading passage, there is ample
support for the author’s claim that people get some advantages from GM crops.
However, the professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a rebuttal to
the author’s point.
First of all, the professor argues that GM
crops are not suitable solution for world poverty. The real problem that causes occurs
world hunger is unequal distribution of food rather than the amount of production
which is already enough to feed people all over the world. This casts doubt on
the reading passage’s claim that GM crops can help the poor to eat enough food
by increasing the amount of crops which have mutated DNA including the ability
to exploit sun light more effectually.
Next, the professor insists that GM crops
might make food price become higher. The cost that people invest to invent GM
crops is costly because there is not any charity and the company producing GM
crops would expect certain amount of profits, which finally makes the seed
price exorbitant. Moreover, the amount of water that is used to grow GM crops
is more than that spent growing normal crops. 이 부분 내용 좀 더 간단하게 줄여주세요. 자선단체를 끼고 있는 게 아니라는 내용은 꼭 필요한 detail은 아닌 것 같아요. This counters the reading
passage’s assertion that the price of food can be lower by GM crops which have less risk of is
more persistent to unadaptable conditions and as a result reduces the loss of
crop yields.
Finally, the professor contends that
vaccines manufactured by using mutated crops are not available. Modified fruits
conceiving edible vaccines, such as banana or tomato, can be easily spoiled and
therefore the temperature of that vaccine should be regulated well, which makes it hard for vaccines of GM crops hard to be stored and transported. This reputes the
reading passage’s suggestion that GM crops can make vaccines more widely usable
than conventional ones, controlling the temperature of which during shipping
and storage is challenging in developing country, contrast to vaccines in
fruits changed genetically.
Comment : 각 본론에서 두 지문의 대립되는 내용을 잘 정리해주셨어요. 요약문인데 아직 불필요한 내용이 들어간 부분들이 종종 있어서 조금 아쉬웠어요. 꼭 필요하지 않은 detail들은 정돈해서 좀 더 간결한 요약문이 되도록 만들어보시면 좋을 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 4/5 A response at this level is generally good in selecting the important information from the lecture and in coherently and accurately presenting this information in relation to the relevant information in the reading, but it may have minor omission, inaccuracy, vagueness, or imprecision of some content from the lecture or in connection to points made in the reading. A response is also scored at this level if it has more frequent or noticeable minor language errors, as long as such usage and grammatical structures do not result in anything more than an occasional lapse of clarity or in the connection of ideas.
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