Some people might believe that eating out at restaruants is better than cooking and eating at home in terms of saving time and energy. However, I absolutely believe that cooking and eating at home is way better than eating out at restaurants because it is healthier and cheaper.
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To begin with, eating and cooking at home is healthier than eating out at restaurants. There is a tv program named “Food X File” in South Korea which is to detect a food company that uses bad ingredients, which people should not eat in the food. In fact, we cannot know the entire ingredients when we eat out at restaurants. On the other hand, if we cook and eat at home, we know the ingredients since we cook it on our own. For example, let’s suppose we If I make 'Kimbob', a famous seaweed roll in South Korea, traditional food in Korea. We I need to know what ingredients are required to make delicious Kimbob. At this point, While I cook it, I can choose fresh ingredients for my health. However, a lot of cheap Kimbob sold in restaurants are made of low-quality vegetables and meat, which is not healthy.
Second of all, it is cheaper than eating out at restaurants. In the restaurants, all the foods are more expensive than actual prices. This is because the owner and workers need to earn money through this. However, if we just cook and eat ourselves, we do not need to worry about the additional prices. For instance, when I went to a noodle restaurant, I found the same kind of noodle that I used to cook at home. I was surprised that the costs of the noodle were way too expensive compared to the original price of the noodle. It costs 2,500 won in a restaurant, while it only costs 1,000 won when I buy that noodle packet uncooked.
To sum up, cooking and eating at home is healthier and cheaper. In this regard, I absolutely support the statement that cooking and eating at home is better than eating out at restaurants.
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