▶ Your Answer : disagree Many people think that the young generation at present have a tendency to helpi help others more than past generations. However, in my opinion, it is not true that the young generation help others more than the past generation. There are two reasons: First, the connection between people is getting weaker. Second, Tthe young generation have a tendency to invest in themselves, rather than to lend a hand to those in need. To begin with, people are less likely to contact each other than the past. In the past, they gave helps to their neighborhood neighbors more frequently than the present. However, in present society, people have to make a living and survive in a competitive society. So people are too busy to help other people and are becoming more indifferent to each other. For example, when I was 7, I lived in an apartment and I knew almost all everything about my neighborhood. When my mother had an important meeting, Ms kim who lived in my next door always took care of me. When she had some problems, my family are was not reluctant to help Ms. kim. However, I do not know anything information about my current neighborhood because I am too busy to contact with them. my neighbors. On the top of that, Tthe present generation are tend to invest on themselves. At In the past, the competition was not so severe that it was possible to give a helping hand. However, the competition in society is very serious intense now. To survive in the this competitive society, they people have to accumulate more experiences, knowledges and competency competencies than other people. So they are not helping other people when they have enough time and money to help others. Rather, they use the time and money for themselves. For example, a research was conducted by sociology majors.sociologists. They asked 200 people who were living in seoul that if you they have had enough money and time, would you spend the time and money for others or for yourself? whether they would spend their available time and money to help others or to use it on themselves.(이 문장이 더 정확해요.) The outcome was shocking. Overwhelming 80% of people replied that they would use the time and money for themselves to accumulate knowledge and experiences. To sum up, I firmly support the idea that the present generations are is not helpful than compared to the past generations.
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