▶ Your Answer :
Although there is no
complete consensus that has been reached on this topic, yet I would like to
take a stance and make my agreement with the given thesis that people would come
up with better solutions if they work as a group. In order to substantiate my
central focal points, I will provide specific reasons and explore the given
topic in great detail in this essay.
To begin with, I firmly believe that better solutions will come out if people work working together with as a group. As a group, people would be able to
discuss diverse opinions with group members and it will bring about better
solutions. Opponents of my perspective claim that working individually to solve
problem is better, because they do not need to care about others’ opinions.
Proponents of this view several points as the rationales for their argument and
their argument might have some validity. But after closer look, there exists an
abundance of examples that calling call into
question what they claim. Among such examples, my personal experience can
elucidate their incorrect viewpoint. I had to prepare for the a history project when I was a middle school student.
Once, a presentation project was given to me not as a group project, but as an individual task. However, preparing for the
project, including research and making a clear sentence was somewhat difficult
for me to do it individually. As a result, my score for the project was
not really good. After the project had have was
done, I received one more project from same
class, and it was not an individual task, but a group project. My group members and I discussed for
the given topic, and it was much easier to deal with the project, and the result was much better than that I have had done it by myself. This validates my
earlier contention that working as a group will bring about better solutions.
The account of mine that I illustrated above is not the only evidence to
support my view. A recent survey conducted by one of the leading educational
firms in Korea endorsed my opinion when the survey respondents were asked
whether they sided with the argument that people can come up with the a better solution when they working as a group or not.
A leading education expert claimed that people will
get better results and solutions to the problems
when they work and cooperate with their group members. This is because, even
though one person’s idea and solution are really good, there will be at least
one weak point. If people work together as a group, their idea and solution
will be much better because they will not only consider their own opinion, but
also their group members’ opinions as well. The reason why it is has
positive effects is that the group members will
be able to complement weak points of each member’s opinion, while also improving strong points of their solution.
In conclusion, in spite of the fact that there may be some opinions that
working individually would be more beneficial to come up with better solutions, taking into account of all the factors that I
described above, we may reach to the conclusion that people would be
able to come up with better solutions when they work and cooperate with group members.
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