▶ Your Answer :
Undoubtedly, a friend plays a significant
role in people’s daily lives in many of the places where they work or play.
Some people might think that letting a friend make a mistake is better than
saying or doing something not or break up friendship, while others do not. (주제 단어 그대로 활용 지양해 주시고 Paraphrase해 주세요) Both
sides may have their own reasons to support their views. If I were asked to
choose one, I would say that it is better to say or do something for friends
than to let a friend make a mistake not to break up friendship. There
are several reasons as follows.
- TOEFL에서 중요한 것 중 하나는 단어/구절을 최대한 반복하지 "않는 것" 입니다. Paraphrase 에 신경써주세요.
To begin with, giving some advice is a duty
as a true friend. A true friend is someone who can rely on when I feel depressed. Also, this sincerity in friendship allows someone to lead another to go a right way. If I just let my friends make a mistake, my
friend would blame me as not correcting his mistakes, turning back to each
other in the end. On the other hand, advice serves as a tool to correct friend’s
mistake, stay out of trouble, and improve my friends (improve in what way?). When this advice is well-taken, he or she would have a stellar achievement by preventing them from
getting into a perilous way. For example, when I was in a high school, I felt
depressed thinking that my life became an exhausting routine. To survive in a
competitive world, I spent the whole day studying all academic subjects, hoping
that I could outdo others. Although I made constant effort, it was not easy because
everyone was working as hard as I was. So, I tried to smoke cigarettes to relieve my stress. However, one of my best friends came up to me and gave
advice that cigarettes would destroy my high school life, deterring me from
having a right judgement. She also took me to a cinema, and we watched the
latest movies every week. Especially, when I watch an action movie, I got a
vicarious thrill out of watching heroes punish the evil. By doing this, I was
able to let off my steam in a safe way and keep good behaviors by raising my
grades. Otherwise,
I could have involved myself in dangerous activities such as drugs or fights as
a way to handle a lot of stress and strain by blaming my friend.
+ 2nd body paragraph with different reason + example 작성 해 주세요.
All things considered, I strongly believe
that the impact of saying or doing something far outweigh that of letting
friend make a mistake for those reasons I have
mentioned above. All in all, saying or doing something for friends cannot be
overestimated in the pursuit of a true friendship.
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