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Attitudes conflict on whether it is easier
for people to become educated than before. I stand for proponents of the view
that people find it easier to get education than in the past. First, free
online learning is available to everyone. Second, secondary education is
provided free of charge.
Fundamentally, everyone can access to free
online learning. The opposing side argues that it was easier to get educated
before. Advocates of this school of thought claims several arguments as the
basis for their beliefs. While their argumentation may appear valid on the
surface, it does not with stand vigorous scrutiny. Actually, a flood of
evidence renders their views erroneous. For instance, my particular observation
reveals why people to become educated is easier nowadays. A friend of mine who
is a successful businessman, when he was a high school student, he found it
hard to catch up with classes. He could not take private tutoring because it
was expensive. Thankfully, he was searching for internet and was able to catch
up with online courses. After he graduated high school, he naively chose to enter a
college to further study in organic and nano science engineering. However, his
parents could not afford to give him college tuition. Nevertheless, he was able
to educate himself on the field, by logging on to the Internet and getting
specific and in-depth information easily and quickly. None of them with even a
hope, was possible without online learning and those became popular nowadays. This
supports the thesis that people can more easily get educated these days.
In the second place, you do not have to pay
for education when you are in middle school and high school. Beyond my personal
experience, current research substantiates my perspective. Apart from a small
portion of people who sided with the opposite idea, a significant majority of
survey participants endorsed my point of view that becoming e educated is easier
than before. A father of two high school kids said on survey, the financial
burden of sending his kids to school is not big. He added that this is possible
because tuition free education is offered in middle school and high school.
Another parent responded that he is no more concerned about education costs
because many schools introduced free school lunch. On the contrary, a high
school principal recalled that many parents gave up on educating their kids
because they had to pay a lot of money for school education in the past. Such
notions attest that people have easier access to education than before.
Ultimately, people are more easily becoming
educated nowadays for the evidence I have provided previously. First, online
education is readily available. Second, it does not cost money to learn in
middle school and high school.
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첫번째 본문 -인터넷 대문자, 소문자 한가지로 정해서 통일해서 써주세요. -to enter 써줌으로써 좀더 디테일한 설명해주세요.
두번째 본문 -to 부정사 아니므로 ing 형태로 써주세요. -that절 뒤에 주어+동사 써주셔야 합니다. 동사가 빠졌으므로 is 써주세요. -free school lunch 뜻을 알 수 없습니다.
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