The reading passage provides
evidences that the zebras’ strip serves crucial defensive function. However,
the professor disagreed with the author’s argument and pointed out that it is
actually a misconception.
(GOOD)
First of all,
the professor insists that the strips in zebra cannot provide an extra time to
escape. Considering the hunting technique that predators normally use, making
an illusion is not relevant with zebra’s defense. Lion, for example, tends to
target weak and old individuals out of the herd, which are comparatively easy
target to chase and catch when they become exhausted. Therefore, there is no
room that a dramatic escape could be made in a last minute. It counters the author’s
claim that the strips make a zebra bigger and closer than it actually is, which
could make a good chance and time to escape.
Second, the
professor argued that predators have an ability to distinguish an individual
prey out of a group. In other word, the strips do not hinder a predator while
they decide to game a target. Therefore, zebra has no more advantages than other various
types of animals, such as buffalo and gazelle. This contradicts the assertion
of the reading passage that the strips create confusion, so that they(who?) interrupt the ability to pick out an individual target.
Lastly, according
to the lecture, the camouflage function of the strip is not well-applied since
zebra is appeared boldly and stay in a middle of a field. They do not usually
hide inside of bushes. Therefore, the strips do not serve as a good camouflage
patterns. This casts a doubt on the author’s argument that the vertical
patterns of the strips reduce the danger of being detected by a potential
predator.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
ADDRESSING TOPIC
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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GOOD
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GOOD
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FAIR
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GOOD
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FAIR
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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