■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : A Franchise business |
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▶ Your Answer :
In the lecture, the lecturer asserts that running
an own business is better than a franchise business. The lecturer contradicts
the writer’s claim that a franchise business has lower risk and is profitable
by opposing three reasons cited by the writer in the reading passage.
First
of all, the lecturer states that franchise owners could lose their control over
the products or services they sell. This is because most franchise owners
cannot be provided with the right to be able to decide what they sell. They are
forced to sell certain products that their headquarters want for them to sell.
This claim of the lecturer casts doubt on the writer’s assertion that a
franchise offers reliable products to franchise owners.
Secondly,
the lecturer claims that many of the franchise owners are not satisfied with the
marketing approach of the franchise headquarters. Franchise owners have to pay
the certain amount of fee in the name of marketing expenditure. On top of that,
this marketing approach does not work well for each individual franchise owner because
it targets broad customers; there is no localization. directed toward wide-range, not to local level. This claim contradicts
the writer’s opinion that franchise owners can save time and money that might
be spend on advertising campaigns.
Thirdly,
the lecturer contends that running a franchise business is unprofitable than we
expected. Most of the franchise owners pay the fee for the services they are
provided from their headquarters or franchise system they use. This fee is too
high for local franchise owners, so it turned out to be a huge burden to them.
This opposes the writer’s claim that franchise business has lower rate of
failure.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
ADDRESSING TOPIC
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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FAIR
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GOOD
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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하지 않고 그냥 술술 풀어나가듯이 적었습니다. 문장도 that which 사용해서 길게 이언나가기보다는 잘라서
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