▶ Your Answer : agree
My opinion - agree
reason1 - University publicize
general statement - upgrade the university’s reputation when get a good grade at A kind of sports
champions ship
specific - japan university / invest to football team / go into final / publicize /
many new sudents apply to university
reason2 - encourage students to interact
general statement - need cooperation in sports - improve a relationship
specific - no friends when i go to school first time / join the foodball team /
make freinds / school life upgrade
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To begin with, investment on sports play an important role in publicizing university image. That is, university can introduce and improve the reputation by applying a kind of sports championships. It is important to them because they can gain profits. To be specific, according to Korea Herald, internet newspaper, Tokyo University in japan invested to its football club. Eventually, they went final and won the championship, gaining a lot of attention from media and public. After this victory, Because of this effect, many students in Japan were attracted to the fame of the Tokyo University and applied to a school for admission. (단순한 유명세에 대한 내용 보다는 구체적으로 학교의 명성을 증진시키는 가장 좋은 방법 중 하나가 "스포츠" 라는 점을 부각하여 내용을 재구성해주세요. internet newspaper회사들은 셀 수 없이 많기 때문에 예시 또한 구체적으로 작성해주세요)
On top of that, playing sports encourage students to interact. Because sports requires specific abilities like cooperation, students can improve a relationship with each other. For example, by using my personal experience, I had no friends when I went to my university at first. Therefore, I joined football team in campus and made new group friends. As a result, my school life was advanced. (어떤 측면에서 발전했는지; 스포츠를 통해 쌓은 social skills를 바탕으로 더욱 많은 친구를 사귀었는지 등 내용을 작성해주세요)
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