▶ Your Answer : There are several kinds of assignment. It has been widely debated whether or not work working as a group is beneficial than work working alone on project. Although there has been a heated discussion regarding this issue, I strongly believe that it is much more beneficial to work alone, thanks to for the following main reasons.
First, group projects are mostly depends on the group members. There are might be some people who are not responsible for their work. They are not participating in on the project. 명확한 '주장'을 먼저 제시해주세요. 그룹프로젝트는 그룹멤버에 달려 있다는 주장은 너무 모호합니다. 그룹프로젝트의 '성과'가 멤버에 따라 달라지기 때문에 혼자 하는 것보다 결과가 더 안좋다거나, 학생들이 너무 스트레스를 많이 받을 수 있다거나, 공정하지 않다거나 하는 식으로 명확한 근거를 먼저 제시해주어야 합니다. To specify my argument, I would like to illustrate my personal experience. When I was a college student, I had some group projects. In my group, there were was some people whose major was not related to who were not majoring this the course. when we had a meeting, they never showed up and did not do their work. This is because this class was not important for them. All projects were done by people who major this class. 사례 내용 역시 '혼자서 하는 게 더 나은 이유'를 제대로 설명하지 못하므로 내용 보완이 필요합니다.
Second, it is always difficult to gather together for the project. At least, three members have to schedule their meeting time and place for the group project. Also, members have to find out which role should they do. It takes longer than working alone. 마찬가지로 '주장'이 먼저 나오도록 정리해주세요. 시간이 너무 많이 걸려서 효율이 떨어진다, 하는 식으로 내가 부정적으로 보는 부분이 어떤 것인지를 먼저 소개하고 설명을 연결하는 것이 좋습니다. To illustrate this idea, when I had a group project, it took forever to find out place and time to meet members. Our group had six people and when we made a decision by massage, some people did not read or respond. If we work alone, it is much easier to find out place and time.
In summary, considering all the reasons exposed above, I indeed prefer to work alone. There would be some benefits of group working. However, it often makes worse not only project, but also relationship between group members worse.
Comment : 현재 답안은 그룹프로젝트를 하면 생길 수 있는 어려움을 설명한 정도이지 혼자서 하는 과제가 더 나은 이유가 명확히 드러나지 않는다는 점이 아쉽습니다. 각 본론에서 설명한 내용에서 좀 더 발전시켜서 '왜 혼자 하는 게 나은지'를 명확하게 드러낼 수 있는 글로 만들어주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 지금 제시된 내용들도 활용하기에 충분히 좋기 때문에 내용을 발전시키는 형태로 두괄식 문형을 구성해보시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 수량 표현이나 어순 관련한 문법오류가 종종 있으니 유의해서 검토해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Independent Writing Rubrics Score 3/5 An essay at this level is marked by one or more of the following : - Addresses the topic and task using somewhat developed explanations, exemplifications and/or details (일정 수준의 설명과 예시를 활용하여 문제의 요구사항을 해결함) - Displays unity, progression and coherence, though connection of ideas may be occasionally obscured (문맥이 모호한 부분들이 있을 수 있으나 통일성, 연속성, 일관성이 어느 정도 드러남) - May demonstrate inconsistent facility in sentence formation and word choice that may result in lack of clarity and occasionally obscure meaning (문장의 구성 또는 어휘의 선택에서 내용의 명확성이 떨어지거나 의미 전달이 불분명한 부분들이 있음)
- May display accurate but limited range of syntactic structures and vocabulary (답안의 내용은 주제에 부합하지만 제한된 문장구조나 어휘를 사용함)
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