▶ Your Answer :
Without doubt, evaluation plays a
significant role in people’s daily lives in many of the places where they play
or work. Some people think that students should evaluate their teachers’
performance, while others think that other teachers should do it. If I were
asked to choose one, I would say that students should assess their teacher’s
performance. There are several reasons as follows.
To begin with, when teacher is evaluated by
their students, it allows students to have a better school life. Getting good
result of assessment from students, he should help students to satisfy their
school work. To satisfy it, teacher should pay attention to their students to know
what they want, want to be, and need. When he knows it, it is likely to brings
a better result in student’s life. For example, my sister did poorly in high
school, because she was only interested in fashion. Therefore, she did not didn’t want to
go to school. Prior to evaluating e teacher, her teacher John never had asked to her what
is her interesting in when they had consultations. However, after assessment,
he changed his attitude to her. He had several consultations with her and
finally he knew that she is interested in fashion. He piled up a lot of
resource to be a designer and gave it to her. He persuaded her that she should
study hard to be an excellent designer besides reading fashion books. Thus, she
started to study for her future and finally went to fashion college. Without
evaluation, teacher still ignore her dream.
All things considered, I strongly believe
that the advantage of evaluation of teacher’s performance from students far
outweigh those of assessment from other teachers for the reasons I mentioned
above. All in all, the importance of getting a proper feedback from students
cannot be overestimated in education.
Fair (17-20)
첫번째 본문 -be interested in -축약형 지양해주세요. didn't-->did not -go to school -prior to 명사 이경우에는 동명사 evaluating -besides 명사 이 경우에는 동명사 reading
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