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Some people say that history courses should not be excluded in education courses. However, in my opinion, students don't necessarily have to take history courses. This is because history is out of use in real life and students should focus on what they want to learn. >space To begin with, history does not have practical value. In our daily life, we are closely connected to social issues, science technologies, somewhat computing power and language skills but not to historical thinking. For example, I learned many parts of histories throughout the world like Western history, Chinese history, Japanese history, and especially Korean history. Unfortunately, I tested these histories as one of my College Scholastic Ability Test courses. But after this big exam, I've never met only one of topics in history courses in daily lives. It doesn't required in daily life. I feel that my effort devoted to the history courses isn't worth as much as I tried. try. >space One top of that, students should pay all their attention to what they want to learn. Forced learning is not effective way to learn. It reduces interest in the forced courses and even causes resistance to the subjects. For example, Iin my college grades, there were are striking disparities between courses I liked and those I did not don't like. I had to learn some courses because they were required. Finally, I got bad grades in the required courses and I got to dislike disliked the related fields. If I had not taken have not to take the courses, I could have spent lots of time studying what I really wanted to learn. I am sure I would have moved up more in the field where I had have potential to do better. >space In short, we do not need historical knowledge in daily life as much as we have to take the courses. And it is clear that the stress of from taking some specific courses students are not interested in results in decline of interest. For these reasons, students do not need to take history courses.
Comment : 주제에 맞게 내용을 잘 구성해주셨어요. 실용성과 학습효율 측면에서 주장을 제시한 부분들이 아주 좋았습니다. 시제부분 문법오류가 종종 있으니 유의해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~! Independent Writing Rubrics Score 4/5 An essay at this level largely accomplishes all of the following : - Addresses the topic and task well, though some points may not be fully elaborated (문제의 요구사항을 대부분 잘 해결함) - Is generally well organized and well developed, using appropriate and sufficient explanations, exemplifications and/or details (적절하고 충분한 설명과 예시를 사용하며 대체로 글의 구성과 전개방식이 양호함) - Displays unity, progression and coherence, though it may contain occasional redundancy, digression, or unclear connections (중복된 내용이나 관련 없는 내용, 불분명한 연결이 있을 수 있으나 통일성, 연속성, 일관성이 드러남) - Displays facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety and range of vocabulary, though it will probably have occasional noticeable minor errors in structure, word form or use of idiomatic language that do not interfere with meaning (글의 의미를 손상시키지 않는 범위 내에서 사소한 문장구조, 단어 형태 오류를 보일 수 있으나, 전반적으로 어휘・통사적 다양성을 갖춘 유창한 언어 사용을 보임) |