▶ Your Answer : The rReading passage contends that coal has various benefits with three reasons. However, the lecturer brings up several points to contradict this view.
First, according to the lecturer, in case of coal, it is not easy to mine, but complicated. As the amount of the coal which is buried in the earth is limited and exhausted, miners have to dig a deep tunnel into ground. This casts dought doubt on the reading passage's assertion that the merits of coal is that it is easy to mine.
Second, the speaker asserts that it is not cheap and easy for coal to be shipped. In fact, it takes requires a lot of technical skills and money for coal to be shipped, because coal it is heavy and bulky, when compared to other fuels such as oil and natural gas. Also, it needs several trips to move coal by trains and trucks. This refutes the reading passage's view that the cost of transportation of coal is very low.
Finally, the lecturer speaks that it is not true that the coal industry creates creats a lot lof of job opportunities for workers. As coal mining companies try to reduce cost of mining, they develop develope various technologies technology. As a result, due to the development of automatic facilities, the needs of human skills are which reduces the need for human workforce in this field. In the long run, job opportunities apportunities will decline be declined in the future. This contradicts the reading passage's claims that the coal industry benefits bendfits job opportunities for workers. 문단 내용이 너무 깁니다. 중복되는 내용이나 크게 중요하지 않은 내용을 줄이고 더 간단하게 정리해주세요.
Comment :
reading이 언급하는 장점에 대한 반박요소를 잘 파악해주신 것 같아요. 단순히 reading이 coal의 장점을 나열한 것인지, 미래 전망과 연결한 것인지 지문을 한 번 더 확인해보시면 좋을 것 같아요. 미래 전망이나 추측을 주로 한다면 요약에서도 그 내용을 넣어주는 것이 중요할 수 있습니다. 문법오류와 오탈자가 종종 있으니 이 부분도 꼼꼼하게 체크해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3.5/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections. |