Some
people may say that learning about the past has no value for those of us living
in the present. However, I had have a
different idea. I strongly believe that it is very beneficial for modern people
to study the past. First, people can reduce repeated mistakes. Second, they can
gain right historical awareness.
To
begin with, it is useful for current people to learn about the past because
they can decrease the occurrence of the same
mistakes that were made in the past. In other
words, people tend to repeat same mistakes because what people want in lives
life are similar. When it comes to war, Korean
war, world war 1, 2, starting from the past, people seek to defeat others and
obtain territory. Even if conquerors can gain areas and
other materials through war, so many
people are had died of war. Thus, in
order to prevent nations from fighting each other, the
UN has come into being. Thanks to the UN, the possibility of war can has declined and
conflict between nations can be have been
alleviated greatly.
Furthermore,
people would better learn about the history because they can get correct
historical consciousness. To be specific, it is very important for people to
live with historical consciousness since this mind can contribute to a nation's development. For example, South Korean
students are required to learn history class in school. They study diverse
knowledge about the great men's feat, civil war, and Korean war. Through the
historical education, they would feel that ancestors' feats are tremendous. By thinking about historical events, they can know
their duty as a civilization. In South korea, all men have to enlist to
military and serve it for 2 years in order to secure their nation. Even though
military service here is a mandatory duty as a
korean men, they try to contribute to the country's
development and safety without any compensation,
due to correct historical consciousness.
To sum up, by studying history, same
mistakes can be reduced
and learning history helps people gain right civil consciousness. Therefore, I firmly believe that
it is significant for people to learn history.
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