▶ Your Answer :
Many students in their freshman year could
be outraged if they have to take additional compulsory courses. However I
believe that taking “good study habit” course should be required for all
students who have just entered the college. I feel this way for two reasons
which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, there is always an efficient and
effective way of doing something. To be more specific, we have to learn skills that
can take us into higher level of accomplishment if we want to be good at
whatever we are doing. My example of taking soccer lessons is a compelling
example of this. I always wanted to be a good soccer player so I would go out
to field and practice soccer skills. However, at certain point, my skills were
not getting any better, so I decided to take a lesson at the community center.
They taught me things that I thought was irrelevant; they made me do jump
ropes, and stepping drills in every class. I think those drills helped me
develop agility because at some point I was able to perform skills I was not
able to could not do when I was not taking the lesson.
Secondly, having skills to study efficiently
can be great help in the future. To be more specific, students will someday
graduate college and have jobs. They will have to learn totally new things at
their jobs and knowing what to do when you have to learn something that are not
familiar can be a great help adapting to new environment. Using those skills
learned in college, they can quickly learn their works and it will make them
more competent, leading to higher chance of promotion or raise in salary in the
future.
In consequence, I feel that good study
habits class should be mandatory for those who have just entered college
because they can achieve their goals more easily, and because those skills will
be helpful in the future. Fair: 17~23 점수: 22 일단 1 문단과 2문단의 길이가 비슷한 것이 더 좋습니다. 한 쪽만 너무 짧고 한 쪽만 너무 길면 unbalance하기 때문입니다. 일단 제가 이 에세이를 읽으면서 지적하고 싶은 부분은 각 바디의 예시들이 이유와 전혀 연관성이 없습니다. 새내기들이 필요한 필수 과목에 대한 주제인데 이것과 전혀 관련이 없는 예시들이 나왔습니다. 예시들을 서술할 때 주제와 맞게 서술하는 것이 가장 기본이 되어 있어야 합니다. 이러한 부분을 주의하시면서 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셧습니다.
질문1-> 1문단과 2문단 길이가 좀 차이가나는데, 길이가 비슷한 것이 좋을가요??
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