▶ Your Answer :
Various
opinions may exist over the argument that it is not scientists’ responsibility
when their discoveries affect humans. As far as I am concerned, I am in
complete agreement with the argument. The two ideas stated below can are valid
evidences to support my view.
To
start with, the world we live in has changed rapidly every day and in every
aspect, and there are many fields to study for scientists have separated and
specialized continuously. (이 문장이 이해가 안돼요. 다시 써 주세요.) Scientists have to study and experiment many things
for good use, but they cannot consider all possibility possible uses of for their inventions.
There are so many science fields to consider, and all technologies we use every
day have pros and cons, so how we employ these technologies is depends on us.
Therefore, it is impossible for scientists to think of all the possibility possibilities of using
technology to apply every aspects of science field. For example, Marie Curie discovered
iridium that which is an important element needed to generate nuclear energy. She did not apply a patient for
her discovery and study (이 문장도 이해가 안돼요. 이 발견을 위해 환자를 안썼다는 뜻인가요?) because she hoped to use this atom to make energy for
human kind. However, nuclear energy now are now used for in weapons that kill millions of
people and destroy huge areas cruelly. Undoubtedly, Marie Curie’s discovery and
her studying them intention to generate energy was developed for human beings, but some use
this invention to make them a weapons and, others make energy.
On
top of that, it is not scientists that make use of technology to affect people,
but people who desire to gain benefits, especially businessmen. Scientists
experiment with their variables their study and experience trial and error because they want to make
their inventions and contribute to the advancement of technology. They have pure
ambitious ambitions to invent new things because these are their hope goals as a scientists.
However, once technologies are invented, they are disclosed to public and
finally many people apply the technology in many aspects of society. In this step, people use
technology to make a profit for from them, and it might be have a negative result that
not scientists’ intention the scientists did not anticipate. For example, scientists invented genetic genetically modified
organisms to cope with the ever-scarcer food supply. They are a very effective way to
solve the lack of food source problem because they can grow almost on all types of every land, and
produce a large amount of crops. However, a multinational corporation Monsanto has
many patients (?) for these crop’s seed, and requires farmers to excessive money to
buy them at a high price and However, the problem is, farmers cannot purchase them. As a result, despite of having this
technology, some people somewhere in the world still suffer from lack of food, and
this is not scientists’ fault but the fault of businessmen did.
To
sum up, I believe my explanations above sufficiently prove the agreement of that the
result of discoveries are not scientists’ responsible.responsibilities. Obviously, my
significance of argument that scientists’ have difficulties difficulty of considering all aspects and that the use
of technologies for benefit are used unjustifiably cannot be overemphasized enough.
[Score] 22-23
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