When people celebrate a special event, various opinions may exist. over the
argument Some people prefer a
large party with lots of people while others prefer a small party with only a
few close family members. As far as I concerned, I prefer a large
party with lots of people because large party with lots of people
is more advantage than small party with only a few family members.
The two reasons stated below can be valid
to support my view.
To begin with, having large party with other
people will enable one to interact with different people and develop
interpersonal skills. In detail, people only can have a narrow range
of relationship with close people due to daily routine and surrounding. These usually do not change from day to
day. However, it is important to have a chance / chances to
meet other people with different backgrounds. and variety filed. For example, the survey was conducted by
UCLA’s research department. The survey asked chief executive officers of (숫자) companies in California about whom they preferred
between a person who has social skills and a man who keeps narrow range of relationship with his friends. The majority of officers responded that the
former type is preferred. should have priority. On the other hands, the percentage of CEO who
supported the latter was extremely small. This is because According to the few response of the officers, the person who has
interpersonal skill through various chances shows better performance and blend
well with other people. The survey’s result indicated that having opportunity
which meets diversity people is critical though in society.
In addition, having large party with other
people will enable one to gain people new experiences. Specifically, people attain the know-how which
is how deal with on how to deal with other people through this experience. People can always learn something from their
life even if seems unenjoyable and difficult. In my case, when I was in high school, I
had an experience to prepare for a high school festival. At that time, I got a lot of stress from managing schedule and keeping balance with different people’s opinion. After this event, I can learn how to overcome problem relating to time management and gathering opinions to make a good solution. when we did not concur the issue. This experience is valuable to me whatever
I do.
(앞에서 제시한 이유 2가지 요약해주세요; 2~3문장) Taking all these consideration, I
personally believe that the larger party is more advantage than small party with
only a few family members.
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