▶ Your Answer :
Although there is no complete consensus that has been
reached on this topic, yet I would like to take a stance with one of the given
options that school should build a quiet study area in dorms to improve quality
of student’s life in dormitory. In order to substantiate my central focal
points, I will provide specific reasons and explore the given topic in great
detail in this essay.
To begin with, I firmly believe
that it will contribute quality of student’s life to build a quiet place in
dorms. This is because there are numerous students who want to study in a quiet
place. Opponents of my perspective claim that it would better to build an exercise
room to keep physical well-being or an entertainment room. Proponents of this
view several points as the rationales for their argument and their argument
might have some validity. But after closer look, there exists an abundance of
examples that calling into question what they claim. Among such examples, my
personal experience can elucidate their incorrect viewpoint. When I was a high
school student, I often get trouble with studying at classroom in school
building. The main reason was there was many students who didn’t focus on their
studies but on hanging around or talking with one another. Many students including
me had undergone such trouble, so we thought it would better to build a quiet
place to study for only students who want to study on the evening. This
validates my earlier contention that building a quiet place to study in dorms
will contribute quality of student’s life.
The account of mine that I
illustrated above is not the only evidence to support my view. A recent survey
conducted by one of the leading educational consulting firms in Korea endorsed
my opinion when the survey respondents were asked whether they sided with the
argument that constructing a quiet study area will contribute quality of student’s
life or not. A leading education expert claims that it is really helpful to
improve student’s academic achievements to build a quiet study area in dorms.
The expert states that since many students want to enhance their academic
achievement, considering it as one of important things in their lives, constructing
a quiet study area would be one of ways to encourage students to study more diligently.
He also asserts that it is shown as true from his research that in a reality,
the students who spent their time studying in quiet place understood much better
about topics what they learned and achieved higher academic achievement.
In conclusion, in spite of the fact
that there may be some opinions that it would be better to build an exercise
room or entertainment room, taking into account of all the factors that I
described above, we may reach to the conclusion that constructing a quiet study
place will contribute quality of student’s life.
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