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Some people think that there are many great better teachers except than
parents. However, In my opinion, I believe that parents are the best teachers around
the world. This is because They are always take care of their
children genuinely and give them a lot of information to live.
First of all, parents continuously give their kids genuine love. This is
because it is seriously hard to raise babies and take care of them sincerely. For example, When I was a kids,
I had got an trivial injury from the school. At that time, for all
since my parents were working at their
companies, they came to me to see how much danger hurt I was when they heard the news. It was very astonishing that my parents came to me due
to because I did not expect them to come coming and realized their real love that no one could replace.
Also, They have a lot of experience to live. To be specific,
they have tremendous experiences and knowledge than me because they
have lived the world for a long times.
What I mean is that When I moved to another
country to study in the college, I did not know how to doing
laundry, cooking, and doing chores. So, I called my mom and asked how to
do that. My mom generously thought taught
me a lot of things that I have had to do by myself. Since my mother gave me many
a lot of information about that, now I am able
to stand alone without others’ help. Moreover, I
was in a strange place that I and had no one to talk to
nor play with and play. So, I called my
mom again and she said told me to join a
school club to make a friends. By this advisement, I could get a lot of
friends in that place and. Thanks to my mom.
For these reasons, I agree with the statement that parents are the best
teachers in the world. This is why they are really thinking because they really think about of their
children and try to show what is the accept best
method idea to live in the world.
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