It is said that not all the way to advance a country is improving schools. However, the best way to enhance a country is to invest/investing in schools. This is because investment in/at school has positive effects on the students by helping fostering their various abilities as well as the society by decreasing the number of illiterate people in improved schools that can accommodate more students.
First of all, improving schools gives rise to student’s successful life. To be specific, when they the government spends more money on schools, the teachers in diverse departments can be hired so that students can have the many opportunities to learn various fields of study variety of activities. As a result, it is easier to seek their job more successfully by experiencing many activities and eventually leads to the development of country’s economy. (이 문장은 다소 비약이 심한 문장입니다) According to United Kingdom’s Education Council, when they made a had more budget on schools, students who participated in many school activities did academically better than those who were not given activities from schools due to a low budget. This is because they know how to handle multiple tasks by doing extracurricular activities such as playing musical instruments, computer classes and learning calligraphy. On the whole, students who juggle activities are more mature and better equipped to succeed than those who have not done were not done. These benefits extend for outside the classroom far.
Moreover, giving more money on schools makes a contribution to lowering illiteracy rate. This is because unlike the past when economies were based on agriculture and manufacturing which were mainly labor-oriented, the young generation is living in the information age nowadays. Thus, it is a trend that a much higher priority is placed on literacy all around the world. As a result, schools can help more students to write and read with the advanced technology advancing at a fast-growing rate. According to studies conducted by the National Association of Adult Literacy, those who can read and write currently have an enormous competitive advantages over those who cannot because developing and industrialized countries are increasingly moving toward economies based on the manipulation of information. Also, the studies pointed out that students who learn at schools tend to easily donate much money to social organizations. (이 문장은 illiteracy rate과는 무관한 내용이죠)
To sum up, upgrading schools ensures student’s success as well as country’s economic growth. In this regard, the government should place a higher value on schools.
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