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In this given set of material, there are some discrepancy between the view of the author and the lecturer over the difference between Bonobos and Chimpanzees. The lecturer affirms that indeed Bonobos and Chimpanzees are not different while the author suggests otherwise. (GOOD)
To start with, the lecturer disagrees with the author’s first conjecture since it is not based on factual basis. To elaborate in detail, the lecturer claims that according to the researchers who visited Congo saw wild Bonobos throwing objects to researchers. Also, they saw Bonobos fighting with each other. This view is in direct opposition to the author’s claim that Chimpanzees are aggressive innately while Bonobos are gentle animal.
In addition, the lecturer also indicates the dissent over the author’s idea on the difference between Bonobos and Chimpanzees. The lecturer sounds convinced that the author is making a manifest error about how Bonobos and Chimpanzees treat young members. Young Bonobos are always cared by their parents while young chimpanzees do not; this causes young chimpanzees susceptible to enemy while young Bonobos cannot be attacked. However, the author clarifies that young Bonobos can be attacked while Chimpanzees are protected.
Thirdly, the lecturer goes on to expound that the author’s final point on eating habit is flawed. The lecturer mentions the difference in condition they are facing to corroborate the opinion. Human development made the decrease in the number of fruits in Chimpanzees' environment, leading them to not to be able to eat fruit as many as they want; but they eat fruits, too. In contrast, the Bonobos eat fruit simply because their habitat where they get fruits is not destroyed yet. However, this counters the author’s theory that Bonobos have vegetation diet while Chimpanzees are meat-eaters.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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