▶ Your Answer :
While some people argue that being honest to one's friends is not important,
I believe this is not true. I firmly believe that it is not important to
be honoest honest to your friends at all
times. This is because being honest at all times is an important social skills
that is necessary in life. Also, it would be even more stressful if one's
friend finds out that the person is not trustworthy.
First, having a habit of being honest at all times
is an important social skill in life, especially in school and at the work place. By being honest to one's closest
friends at all times, one will have a habit of being honest to everyone that
one meets in life. Because nowadays, universities, schools, and companies
require those that are not only specialists in their fields, but are also good
at social skills. (문장이 너무 기니 중간에 한 번 끊어주세요.) and To realise realize the importance of being honest, one must
practice being honest towards those of the who
are the closest. This is especially important as these skills that one
gains from social interactions cannot be developed by simple effort, but one
needs to work constantly to improve them. For example, my friend Mira is always
very polite and honest towards her friends. I
noticed that she is also very polite and honest to her teachers. I learned from
her that it is always significant to be honest and nice towards anyone at all
times.
Second, it is even more stressful when
friends notice that the person is not trustworthy. People normally become
friends with those who they can share their emotions and concerns with and
these things are considered private and secrete that one does not want
others to know. However, if a friends find out that one is not
honest, they he will no longer want
to talk about their his personal things
and no longer want to keep their his
friendship with the person. This will be even more stressful to the person who
is not honest at all times. Statistics from Seoul National Universities
indicated the following. Among 2000 participants, 45% (45%는 너무 작은 수치입니다.) of them thought that it is
important that their friend is honest towards them. Among the 45%, 60%
responded that they will not maintain the relationship
with their friend if they are not honest. This shows that
friends or people close to you will part away if one is not honest,
and this will definitely be more stressful for the person.
Lastly To conclude, the reasons stated above
explains why it is important to be honest at all times, mainly
because these social skills must be improved over time and because it
will be stressful for the person if friends do not want to continue the
friendship.
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Comment: |
서론에서 큰 오류가 있었고,
전체적으로 문법 오류가 참 많았어요. 글을 쓰신 다음 시간적 여유가 난다면 한 번 씩 검토하시는 습관을 기르시는 걸 추천 드립니다. |
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