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I believe one should wait until people get used to the a product rather than to buy a new product right after
it is introduced. This is because it is very stressful later when one uses
all their his money on buying the new
product, which is usually very expensive. Also, one should use their his money patiently, in order
to buy a product wisely. one useful products.
First, the price of a product usually decreases over time, and one should
wait until the price declines has declined
as it is stressful after spending to spend
all their his money on the product.
As the price of a new product is more expensive compared to older
ones, spending one's money will be a source of stress
because one will no longer have the money to spend on other things.
Second, there are a lot of competitions these days. People
needs to be effective with time and as well as with
money. People should spend their money wisely, and be patient when buying stuffs.
(stuff라는 단어는 slang표현이기 때문에 최대한 사용을 자제해 주세요.) They should, therefore, spend their money on useful things, such as to
prepare for their exams and universities. I believe it is never the
best idea to buy new products right away without thoughtful considerations.
Lastly, the reasons stated above are why I disagree with the given
statement.
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