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A government has a
responsibility to predict and fund a research project that has potential power
to improve people’s life. Some people may argue that a government should only
focus on a research which is anticipated useful results. However, I believe
that a research has own value and importance, so a government should not ignore
its potential in a long-term. Often it yields accidental benefits that could
not have been predicted before.
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The first reason I
have such a view is that each research project has its own value and importance
although it does not seem to have any useful results. For example, A huge
number of money was invested in the part of particle physics. At first, this
research project did not generate useful outcomes for human. Yet in the
long-term, this research starts to contribute in diverse fields and create
useful innovation and theory. If a government did not fund such research
project, the great innovation and development would not come in our world. --> Example이라고 보기에는 다소 general한 측면이 있습니다. 사실일 경우 구체적으로 어떤 국가에서 해당 발전이 있었고 어떠한 발명/발견을 통해 그만의 가치와 중요도를 입증했는지 (practicality가 아닌 가치) 작성해주세요.
Furthermore, many
great innovation and discovery are found accidentally. It is true that scientists often
create unpredictable new products along their original research project; often we call this a byproduct. The NASA space program originally pursues exploring space.
Surprisingly, this program produces many useful byproducts from water filter to the improvement on satellite function. In the field of genetics, for example,
the human genome project intended to produce a map of the human genome. Years later, we are using this research to develop gene therapies for cancer and
other diseases.
In conclusion, we
should not discard a research proposal just because if offers no immediate
benefit. (주제에 대한 본인 주장 요약해주세요) Nobody could determine the potential of a research project before it
had developed completely.
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