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Some
people argue that the most effective way to learn about a foreign country is to
read newspapers or magazines from that country (주제 문장 그대로 사용하지 마시고 paraphrase해 주세요) because they can get
contemporary information of the country. However, I think the most effective
way to learn about a foreign country is getting around to visit that country and meet people who live in the country.
First of all, even though it is true
that newspapers or magazines have a lot of information of the country, the
information is just written on paper. We are not able to experience and feel how the culture and atmosphere is like in real life. that information actually. On the contrary, going outside and getting around the
foreign country make us experience a lot of things directly. For example, People will not be able to taste the food on the newspaper or magazines because it is
just an image of the food, but people can taste it for real if they are at the place written on
them. Also, even though people can learn about the history of the country by the newspaper,
people will not able to directly see the entire historical relics and feel the energy and atmosphere of it. images. If people visit the foreign country for real, people are able to feel the gorgeousness of the relics directly if we are in that
place. Therefore, in my opinion, going outside and then feeling the foreign
country more directly is the most effective way to learn about a foreign
country. (예시는 we로 시작하는 general한 내용이 아닌 직접적 사건/경험/통계자료 등을 사용해야 합니다.)
Next, meeting and talking with the local people living in foreign country is one of the best ways to learn about a foreign
country. I can say that it is more important than what I mentioned on the prior
passage. Because People will be able to learn about more minute information about
the country by staying and communicating with the people who live in that
country. For instance, people can get information such as daily routine of the people living in that country or secret places that are not well-known to regular travelers. Also,
living with them can make travelers feel more like they belong to locals. This is
definitely a great chance to know the foreign country. (사람들과 가까워지고 이로 인해 어떤 것을 배울 수 있는지에 대한 설명이 부족합니다. 어떤 것이 'great chance' 인 경우 그것이 왜/어떤 측면에서 great chance인지 본인의 주장이 연결될 수 있어야 합니다.
In conclusion, I think that just
reading newspaper or magazine to get information about the foreign country is
not effective. These
are (앞서 작성된 2가지 이유를 요약해주세요) totally effective ways to learn about a foreign country. Therefore, we need to go out and make friends who live in the country. Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
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