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There are some people who believe that universities should hire famous professors rather than improving facilities such as libraries and computer labs. However, I personally disagree with the above statement for the two subsequent reasons. First, improved facilities help students succeed academically. to upgrade their performance. Second, students will get more chances to expand their knowledge. there is more chance for students to develop knowledge by improving facilities.
First, improving facilities lets will allow students to perform better. get better performance. Students will show interest in this newer and finer environment and they will use those facilities more often. It will eventually lead to their academic success. This is because improved facilities can raise students' interest in subjects and thus increases their concentration. According to the a recent study conducted by Seoul National University, done by Prof. Kim of Seoul University, more than 80% of the participants respondents said that they were able to get better grades after their schools built new facilities. obtained better grades after the university they study at improved its libraries and computer labs. Also, they added that they could concentrate better. the improved facilities made them concentrate well. This clearly shows good facilities help students achieve more academically. that students can get better grades by improving facilities.
On top of that, students can further develop knowledge in new facilities. by improving facilities. In other words, improved libraries or computer labs can help solve students’ curiosity since they provide more books and better research installations. can read a lot of papers and search information through the internet. Let me bring up my personal experience. When I was a freshman in college, I wanted to research more about chemistry, was full of questions about chemistry, but there were only one small library and a computer lab in my university. Since I could not get enough information, I was not able to complete my assignments. the books and papers in the library were too little and the computer was too slow to satisfy my curiosity, I could not concentrate on the next concepts. However, after a few years, the facilities were improved so I was able to research more could solve my questions much more easily and broaden my knowledge about chemistry. If it hadn’t been for the improved facilities, I could have struggled with unsolved questions and not have broadened my knowledge.
In conclusion, improving facilities allows students to get better performance and deeper knowledge. In this regard, I firmly believe that it is most important for universities to improve facilities than to hire famous professors.
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