▶ Your Answer :
The reading
passage and the lecture are both about coal. The author of the reading believes
that the coal industry has many merits and it will continue to be useful in the
future. The lecturer opposes the specific points made in the reading.
First of all,
the lecturer points that the mining the coal is a complicated process. This is
attributed to the fact that if they extract the coal, they need to burrow below
the surface. 'they'라 칭할 수 있는 것이 없기 때문에 키워드를 밝혀서 써 줘야 해요. The miners should dig the tunnels for hundred meters underground.
Now, highly technical skills and trained workers are needed to mine coal. 더 간단하게 줄여서 써도 좋을 것 같아요. This
refutes to the author’ point that mining coal is easy.
Moreover, in the
lecture, the point is made that coal is quite costly to ship. This is because
that it is heavy and bulky. Therefore, it should be shipped by through a significant
number of trips by with truck and train. This casts doubt on the idea in the
reading that the cost of transporting of coal is low.
The final point
made in the lecture is that coal industry doesn’t make more jobs for workers
anymore. It is obvious that many coal companies try to reduce costs on hiring
labors and introduce new technology. If this continues, the number of jobs
which are created in the coal industry will decline. be declined. This is different form
the passage’s view that the coal industry will continue to hire more workers in
the future.
While both the reading passage and the lecture deal
with coal, the lecturer effectively opposes all of the specific points presented in the reading.요약문이기 때문에 결론문단은 쓰지 않아도 괜찮아요.
Comment : 각 본론마다 대립되는 포인트를 잘 정리해주신 것 같아요. 통합형은 간결한 요약문을 요구하는 유형이니까 반복되거나 불필요한 detail없이 내용을 정리하는 데 초점을 두시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 4/5 A response at this level is generally good in selecting the important information from the lecture and in coherently and accurately presenting this information in relation to the relevant information in the reading, but it may have minor omission, inaccuracy, vagueness, or imprecision of some content from the lecture or in connection to points made in the reading. A response is also scored at this level if it has more frequent or noticeable minor language errors, as long as such usage and grammatical structures do not result in anything more than an occasional lapse of clarity or in the connection of ideas. |