▶ Your Answer : Some people think that they prefer initiating preparation for a presentation shortly after they receive it. However, in my opinion, it is better for me to not to begin before I have the inventive idea. First of all, I can do a presentation of a high quality. In addition, waiting for a good idea makes me learn so many things. To begin with, the perfect idea leads me to a fine presentation. To get a creative concept, we should think about it for a long time because we can not come up with it easily. It means that a long preparation helps me get a distinct idea. On the other hand, people who started their assignment immediately have general presentations, since they do did not spend much time thinking of an idea. As a result, more deliberation causes more high grades. For example, according to the survey conducted by UCLA’s research department, 79 percent of the participants answered that they got high grades after they had long preparation for assignments. Further, their opinions were supported with logical reasons similar to that of mine. On top of that, I can learn many things during preparation for a presentation. I should find much information to have the perfect idea. In this process, I get various opportunities to study about new subjects that I did not know before. Moreover, many people give advice for my assignment when having enough time to get an idea for the assignment. Thus, I learn new knowledge from their advice. For instance, last semester, I got assignment from my music course. During research for presentation, I learned about classical musicians and history of classical music. Furthermore, my friends let me know supplement points of my assignment. Consequently, I improved my presentation and got an A in the course. 정보를 찾고 조언을 듣는 것은 바로 준비하는 것에 더 가까운 내용인 것 같아요. 좋은 아이디어가 떠오를 때까지 충분히 시간을 가졌다가 과제를 시작하는 것이므로 정보를 찾고 조언을 듣는다는 식의 내용보다는 '스스로 충분히 깊이 생각해볼 수 있어서 과제 이해도가 높을 것이다'하는 식으로 내용을 만드는 편이 자연스러울 것 같아요. To sum up, I can give a high-quality presentation to my audiences and learn about new issues while I prepare for it. In this regard, I would start doing my assignment after I get a superb idea.
Comment : 더 나은 과제를 할 수 있고 많이 배울 수 있다는 주장들은 모두 적절합니다. 독립형의 경우 논증형 에세이를 제시해야 하기 때문에 '나'에 국한하기보다는 '일반적으로 사람들은 이러이러하다'하는 식의 논조가 좀 더 적절한 어투이니 참고해주세요. 나만의 특징이 아니라 보통 사람들은 이러이러한 장점을 누릴 수 있다는 식으로 서술하면 설득력 면에서도 더 좋을 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Comment : 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Independent Writing Rubrics Score 4/5 An essay at this level largely accomplishes all of the following : - Addresses the topic and task well, though some points may not be fully elaborated (완벽하지는 않지만 문제의 요구사항을 대부분 잘 해결함) - Is generally well organized and well developed, using appropriate and sufficient explanations, exemplifications and/or details (적절하고 충분한 설명과 예시를 사용하며 대체로 글의 구성과 전개방식이 양호함) - Displays unity, progression and coherence, though it may contain occasional redundancy, digression, or unclear connections (중복된 내용이나 관련 없는 내용, 불분명한 연결이 있을 수 있으나 통일성, 연속성, 일관성이 드러남) - Displays facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety and range of vocabulary, though it will probably have occasional noticeable minor errors in structure, word form or use of idiomatic language that do not interfere with meaning (글의 의미를 손상시키지 않는 범위 내에서 사소한 문장구조, 단어 형태 오류를 보일 수 있으나, 전반적으로 어휘・통사적 다양성을 갖춘 유창한 언어 사용을 보임)
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