▶ Your Answer :
Some people say
that the best way to learn about foreign countries is visiting them. However, in my
opinion, reading printed
media is a better way to learn about other countries in
the world. One reason is that there is a limitation on the number of countries
that people can visit.
Another reason is that people can gain more knowledge by
reading newspapers and magazines.
First,
people have a limitation on the number of countries that they could travel.
This is because visiting countries would cost people much money and time. To
travel foreign countries, flight tickets, meal plan, extra money, and time to
stay might be needed. For example, when I was 16, I traveled Thailand. Even
though I traveled for only three days and stayed at my aunt’s house for free, I
spent d a lot of money and time. To go Thailand, two weeks were needed to find cheapest
flight ticket, which city I would travel, and contact with my aunt. It was very
memorable time in my life. However, to go this one county, I had to sacrifice
much time and money. So I think it is better to read newspapers and magazines
in time that I planned and traveled Thailand.
Second,
reading printed media make people to gain more knowledge. In other words, people
could read many books about foreign countries during short times. And there are
many good books that contain the information of a lot of countries in one book.
So people could learn many foreign countries easily by reading one book. Also, there
is always newly updated news and people could read that on the internet and in
papers. As I mentioned above, in
contrast that visiting countries is inefficient, reading newspapers and
magazines are much better for time and money.
To sum up, time and money constraints limit
the countries a typical person could
visit. Moreover, it is possible to learn more from writers because since
they are experts. In this regard, I believe using
printed media is the best way.
Good (24-26)
첫번째 본문 -stay at 장소 전치사 필요합니다. -문맥상 과거이므로 spend-->spent
결론 -contraint 과 limit 같은 의미입니다. 하나만 써주세요.
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